Things I Like To Do
I have one thing that I like to do, daydreaming. Most people thought that daydreaming is always related to unproductive things. They assume that daydreaming is unproductive because nothing is being done and time is being wasted. In my opinion, I like to daydream because it is weird yet somehow productive. It is productive because while I am daydreaming there must be something that I think which needs to be solved. When I have some problems or some plans I always daydream before I do these stuff. the thing is, it helps me a lot to speed up my work. It is unusual, but that is the way I am.
Good writing..
ReplyDeleteHello Annah.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I am quite enjoy read yours. Somehow, it makes me aware that daydreaming sometimes needed hehe.. Anyway, this paragraph is easy to understand. However, I have some suggestions perhaps will help you.
First, as to support the idea (which is the first sentence), you need to write the 4th sentence to replace the 2nd sentence. After that, followed by the 2nd and 3rd sentence. At the 6th sentence, you need to put comma between words "plans" and "I". Next, you need to capitalized the 7th sentence, "the thing is". My suggestion, the closing sentence should be restated in paraphrase the first sentence or summarized the paragraph.
I think these all the things you need to pay attention on. Overall, you did a great job and I will catch yours a lot on the next post.
Regards,
Inanda M.
I think your thoughts are different from most people's, but I like your writing.keep real.
ReplyDeletei like the daydreaming haha, your article easy to understand so i like it. keep writing and dont ever give up.
ReplyDeleteHello Annah,
ReplyDeleteYes, I agree with you that daydreaming is essential for the human being living day-to-day basis. On top of that, it also a good paragraph and informative. However, I just want to give a suggestion for this word "It is productive because while I am daydreaming there must be something that I think which needs to be solved." change to It is productive because while daydreaming there must be something which needs to be solved. I think that way it will be smoother. Again, that's a good paragraph and hoping to see more of your paragraph :D .
Hi mea,
ReplyDeleteNice writing, I like the way you expain about the thing that you like to do because I think your activities just same as me ✌, your writing is simple and easy for me to understand.I have a suggestion for you, I think you have to focus on your capitalization, because I see the last two senteces which is "the thing is" you can replace it with "The thing is". But overall, great work! Keep it up!^^
Simple and easy to understand, keep it up
ReplyDeleteWowww... its interesting anna.. the way you delivered your story so Simple and easy to understand, but I have some complement for you. Maybe you can explain more about those kind of activities. Overall I like your paragraph.... keep it up ya...
ReplyDeleteHello Mea. I like your writing because it's simple and easy to understand. I have suggestion about your paragraph. In my opinion, you better add 1 or 2 more things about what you usually do in your spare time. overall it is good.
ReplyDeletekeep writing!!
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ReplyDeleteHi mea!! Thats really interesting to read.
ReplyDeleteU have collaborated words in good paragraph.
For suggestion, do care about capitalizations for new sentence and it is no need after comma.
Keep writing!
Hello Annah
ReplyDeleteNice paragraph, you elaborate it with a nice sentence that easily understand. I like it. And, I found it no mistake, because you make a clear major and minor sentence and in the end you summarize it clearly. Keep going to do your best. Oh, maybe just the capitalization. But, overall it is good :)
Victoria Vanessa
Thank you guys for all your comments. It helps me a lot to correct my paragraph :)
ReplyDeleteREVISION - Three Things I Like To Do
ReplyDeleteI have three things that I like to do, daydreaming, random writing, and aloofing. In my opinion, I like to daydream because it is weird yet somehow productive. Most people thought that daydreaming is always related to unproductive things. They assume that daydreaming is unproductive because nothing is being done and time is being wasted. But for me, it is productive because while daydreaming there must be something that I think which needs to be solved. When I have some roblems or some plans, I always daydream before I do these stuff. Second thing, I like to do random writing, it is the time for me to write everything in my mind even my work, imagination and task. That is why I bring my pocket book and my pen wherever I am. Most people assume that bringing pocket book is like a diligent student, in fact they do not know what actually inside my book is, that is too random. However, this random writing have so many benefits for me to remember what actually I have been thinking to make easier my works/tasks. One more weird thing, I like to aloof my self from a crowd. Aloofing my self from a crowd is kind a booster for my self because I can recharge my energy and my mood by being alone. That is true if this is weird, but for me somehow it is productive (again). I like to do these things for reason, it benefits me. Being alone is a tool for me to think and solve my problem because I can’t clearly think in a crowd. I can even think and solve my problem in a crowd, but it reffers to daydreaming because doing this stuff is such being alone and having my own world in the middle of crowd. These two things is correlative, but three of them are weird. The thing is that these three weird activities help me a lot to speed up my work, it is unusual, but that is the way I am.